In a face-to-face class, you would have the advantage of peer editing your comparison/contrast draft. Eventually, the goal is to become a proficient self editor. Before you work on your revised and final comparison/contrast draft, complete this self editing sheet. It is worth 40 points.
Editing Checklist
Use the following checklist to help you evaluate your writing. Remember to give yourself two constructive suggestions and point
out two parts you especially like.
In other words, what did you do well, and what still needs work.
Post the answers in CANVAS. It is possible to copy/paste this into a
Word document and compose your responses. If you prefer, just number your
answers and write compete sentences.
- Can
you identify the main idea or thesis in this essay? Yes/No
- If
so, write the thesis
here___________________________________________________
- Does
the thesis contain the author’s topic and his or her opinion or stand on
this subject? Yes/No
- Does
this essay have an introduction?
Yes/No
- Does
the introduction give an outline of what the author is going to talk
about? Yes/No Was the introduction
effective? Explain.
- Is
the writing clear and understandable?
Yes/No
- Are
there parts of the essay that are unclear?
If so, underline them and put a question mark next to the passage.
- Is
the essay clearly organized using one of the two patterns of organization
for a comparison/contrast essay?
Yes/No Which pattern was used – point by point or topic by topic?
- Does
each paragraph focus on one idea?
Yes/No
- Does
each paragraph end with a transition sentence, smoothly connecting the
ideas of the previous paragraph to the next? Yes/No
- Does
the essay contain persuasive language and strong vocabulary? Highlight five to ten powerful words. Yes/No
- Also,
list 5 nouns, verbs, or adjectives that you think could be changed for
stronger words.
- Does
the essay contain facts to support the claims made? Yes/No Name one.
- Does
the essay have a concluding paragraph?
Yes/No
- Does
the conclusion restate the main points of the essay in a new way and give
a sense of completion and interest to the essay? Yes/No
- Did
the author convince you that one item was better than the other? Yes/No
Additional comments/suggestions:
I Like: I plan
to work on:
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Revise your draft and post the final copy AFTER you complete Assignment #1. FYI: Canvas gives me a time stamp, so I can see when you post assignments. The order is important!
Week #12 Assignment #3 A Walk with Mother Nature (50 points)
You will be writing a problem/solution essay for the next essay. In addition, there are several shorter writing activities designed to get you to think and to clarify your point of view.
Nature: What is Mother Nature Telling Us?
Take a 15 minute walk in nature. Search for messages from Mother Nature. Snap pictures or simply write descriptions of what you see and of the message you "hear." Feel free to describe your pictures instead of posting them. I must confess that for the example I had to borrow a picture from the Internet. Even that decided to evaporate! A photo from my camera came out huge and did not work either! This is not a photo or technology activity. If you are struggling with the picture posting, just describe or borrow. The goal is to get you to think about nature and the environment.
Description of the picture – what did you see?
1. Example:
 Pretend that you can see a picture of a cactus here. I post it, and it goes into cyber space! |
Message- what is Mother Nature saying?
Endure! Enjoy the spotlight or, in this case, the sun.
(Sometimes life is difficult, but we can take a message from the cactus and survive anyway. Did you know that these giants can live over 100 years? Perhaps struggles do make things stronger.)
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Week #12 Assignment #4 - Reading and Reacting to Three Essays(75 points total)
A. "Saving the Songs of the Sea" by Jean-Michel Cousteau who is the son of Jacques Cousteau. He is the president of Ocean Futures Society. (25 points)
· Read the article.
· Select the three most powerful lines or phrases.
· In a sentence or two, explain why you selected the lines and phrases.
· Write a reaction to the selection and explain why you agree or disagree with the author's message.
B. "The Bounty of the Sea" by Jacques Cousteau (25 points)
Note: There is a lot of extra "stuff" at this link. Just read the article and answer these questions. The print difficult to read as it is. Try a copy/paste into Word and change the font color if you can't see it well enough to read. It is worth the effort!
Before you read, define trawlers, effluents, buffer, and plankton. You will get more out of the reading if you understand the terms.
· What is the message or thesis? Did Mr. Cousteau state it clearly in a sentence, or did he share the message differently. Explain.
· What evidence was provided that the ocean might be dying? Is the evidence convincing? Explain.
· In your own words, explain the greenhouse effect. (This term will come up again in this unit. )
· What will happen to humans?
C. "So Earth Had This Boyfriend" by Emily Levine (This is the original title of the article as it appeared in Detla Sky Magazine in April of 2010. ) (25 points)
https://www.emilysuniverse.com/blog/2018/4/25/earth-gets-its-groove-backi-wish
Note: The author uses humor to make a point. Not all people find humor in the same things.
· What is the message?
· What examples are provided?
· Look at the organization. Was the use of a play format effective, or would some other pattern work better? Explain
· Was the use of humor effective? Explain.
· Locate three lines that you would rate as strong, funny, or memorable. Explain why you made the selections.
If you haven't guessed by now, your next BIG essay will be a problem/solution writing. The topic will relate to nature.
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